A Bit of Romace, A Bit of Tragedy (Poetry Month – Day V)

A few days ago, I had a conversation with a friend about some of literature’s great first lines. Melville penned “Call me Ishmael.” CS Lewis wrote, “There was a boy named Eustace Scrubb, an he almost deserved it.” Today, that converstaion returned to me. Here’s a possible beginning, a possible great first line (or two, maybe three).

My Novel’s First Line

It wasn’t
the bullet
that killed him
nor was
it the torture;

it was
the dakness,
thick, heavy, wet,
that whsipered to him,

“She is lost.
She is lost.”

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In response to The Daily Post’s writing prompt: “High Noon.”  “At noon today, take a pause in what you’re doing or thinking about. Make a note of it, and write a post about it later.”

I broke the rules. This post is based on what I was thinking about around noon yesterday.

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7 thoughts on “A Bit of Romace, A Bit of Tragedy (Poetry Month – Day V)

  1. Hey, I needed a fresh exercise for the last two sessions of this term’s creative writing class. This gives me an idea. Thanks.

    By the way, I’ve recommended your Civil War books to the students in my writing poetry classes. I’ve told them about your blog so they can check them out. I hope they are doing so. Sometimes, I have the same students back in another class, but a lot of times I don’t see them again, so it’s hard to know for sure what they’ll do.

    Anyway, I’ve encouraged them to visit you. I don’t do a lot with free verse in the class, and, quite frankly, there’s a lot of really bad free verse out there passing itself off as poetry. But I’ve told them that isn’t the case with your books, and that it will benefit them to see how effectively you use it.

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  2. Ooo! Clapping hands! That is a totally awesome first line. Like saying it wasn’t that mountain that defeated him, it was the grain of sand in his shoe… Now you just have to write the rest of the story.

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